Storyboard First Draft

Following the advice given from Dr Lance Dann (see post: Lecture 5) I've made a very (very!) rough draft of my storyboard. Dann suggested to do "open writing" when script-writing, just to get all your ideas out, so I decided to do the same thing with my storyboard. This is just my rough idea so far and I plan to refine the storyboard with fresh eyes.

The story will start off very slow and ambiguous, with the main character sitting outside Sacre Coeur in Paris. She starts walking through the streets and is suddenly reminded of a previous event in the same location. This triggers a flashback of when she and her sister spotted militant forces for the first time. These shots will only last a few seconds to intrigue the audience but not to give too much away yet.

The flashback ends and the main character continues on her journey. She takes the Metro and as she sits on the train another flashback is triggered. The flashbacks show militant forces coming on to the train and beginning to attack civilians

The main character and her family are seated on the train. The main character and her sister then duck down to hide from the militant forces. However their parents are caught and are killed. The flashback ends and the protagonist is shown crying on the train. She then exits the train station outside the Eiffel Tower.

The sight of the Eiffel Tower triggers yet another flashback. This will be the climax of the story. The protagonist and her sister are shown running around frantically along with many other members of the public. They run into a militant with a gun. The protagonist steps in front of him in the aim to help her sister. There is a confrontation.

The protagonist ends up killing the antagonist, leaving her sister traumatised. Her sister runs into the crowd and is lost forever.

Once the flashback ends, the protagonist is still on her own in Paris, but she turns around and her sister is there. The end.

I've realised there are a few plot holes in my story, but it's just a basic draft for now. I think I have a decent structure, however there is more of the flashbacks than the present tense. I might need to balance this out a bit more and add to the storyline of the present tense.

Inspiration for the flashbacks:

I would like my flashbacks to look similar to this, where it is quite glitchy and fragmented. However I'm not too sure how to show this in my storyboard

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I could frame them in a similar way to Akira with almost still shots which last only a frame each